“These other outputs are useful when additional prompting of the user is achieved via stored messages or indicator lamps.”
BETTER: “These other outputs are useful to prompt the user via stored messages or indicator lamps.”
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“The confirm direction specification is used to set the significance of the sensor to transaction directionality.”
BETTER: “The Confirm Direction is used to specify the transaction directionality of the sensor.”
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“A barrier usually factors into the determination of whether the user has actually moved from one location to another.”
BETTER: “A barrier helps determine whether the user has actually moved from one location to another.”
(Eliminate convoluted phrases such as “factors into the determination of” whenever possible. Simplify, simplify, simplify.)
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