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Even important publications like NYT or WSJ are not immune to generating weak prose, constructed with non-parallel clauses.
Here is one from New York Times (June 7, 2008):
“The hunger strike is meant to pressure federal officials, and comes as Congress is debating an expansion of the guest worker program…”
There’s nothing “wrong” with this sentence except a passive-voice clause is followed by an active-voice one.
This is how I’d edit it:
“The hunger strike aims to put pressure on the federal officials, and comes as Congress is debating an expansion of the guest worker program…”