Latest posts by techwriter (see all)
- Hazards of Poorly Written Technical Documentation - December 26, 2016
- Get an ‘A’ on Your Next Research Paper With These 6 Simple Steps - November 28, 2016
- An Amazing and FREE Source of Magazines and Periodicals — ISSUU - November 25, 2016
Even important publications like NYT or WSJ are not immune to generating weak prose, constructed with non-parallel clauses.
Here is one from New York Times (June 7, 2008):
“The hunger strike is meant to pressure federal officials, and comes as Congress is debating an expansion of the guest worker program…”
There’s nothing “wrong” with this sentence except a passive-voice clause is followed by an active-voice one.
This is how I’d edit it:
“The hunger strike aims to put pressure on the federal officials, and comes as Congress is debating an expansion of the guest worker program…”